this is wonderful...i agree with you that molly's role on the show was far too brief. i think you found her voice beautifully and realistically while taking me, as a reader, through some of the events from canon.
you brought tears to my eyes with this, i can picture it perfectly:
"But I suddenly noticed a man who was sitting all by himself on one of those chairs. He was staring straight ahead, his eyes empty, and it looked as if he wasn’t aware of anything that was going on around him. He looked lost. Scared. He had a nice suit on, and a white scarf around his neck, but the clothes were covered in blood, and so were his hands. Part of the scarf had turned a dark, brownish red."
molly's thoughts hear ring true to me:
"I wanted Dad to love Justin again and I wanted my family to get back together.
The little kid in me had always believed that someday, that would happen. That we would all be a family again. But as time went on, and I started to understand more and more of the problems in my family, I started to think that maybe I had been wrong."
brian's attention to molly, including the necessary nickname, is brian at his best. molly's maturing attitudes as she gets older are also a great part of this first chapter. i especially enjoyed molly's watching brian and justin kiss for the first time (and her thought on exchanging spit!) but her comfort while watching the DVD is the best.
"During the movie I glanced over at Brian and Justin from time to time."..."Brian’s arm was around Justin, who in turn was snuggled up against Brian, his head on Brian’s shoulder. They actually looked kind of cute. I’d never seen them like this before, so relaxed and comfortable and... happy together."
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Date: 2008-09-05 04:33 pm (UTC)you brought tears to my eyes with this, i can picture it perfectly:
"But I suddenly noticed a man who was sitting all by himself on one of those chairs. He was staring straight ahead, his eyes empty, and it looked as if he wasn’t aware of anything that was going on around him. He looked lost. Scared. He had a nice suit on, and a white scarf around his neck, but the clothes were covered in blood, and so were his hands. Part of the scarf had turned a dark, brownish red."
molly's thoughts hear ring true to me:
"I wanted Dad to love Justin again and I wanted my family to get back together.
The little kid in me had always believed that someday, that would happen. That we would all be a family again. But as time went on, and I started to understand more and more of the problems in my family, I started to think that maybe I had been wrong."
brian's attention to molly, including the necessary nickname, is brian at his best. molly's maturing attitudes as she gets older are also a great part of this first chapter. i especially enjoyed molly's watching brian and justin kiss for the first time (and her thought on exchanging spit!) but her comfort while watching the DVD is the best.
"During the movie I glanced over at Brian and Justin from time to time."..."Brian’s arm was around Justin, who in turn was snuggled up against Brian, his head on Brian’s shoulder. They actually looked kind of cute. I’d never seen them like this before, so relaxed and comfortable and... happy together."
fantastic chapter...
jeannie